vacation 写作指导

Thevacation写一篇关于自己旅行的作文。Haveatrip!ItravelledtoHainanislandthissummerholiday.[来~源:%中国教*@育出#版网]Itwassobeautifulthere.Theblueseawasaroundus.It′sverywideandverynice.Thecoconutmilkwasdelicious.Ilikeditsomuch.Ialsolikedtoswimthere.IwashappyandIlookedlikeafish.Iwillalsocomehereforanothertripthenextsummerholiday,becauseitisaniceplacewithabeautifulsceneryanddelicioussfood.词汇：swim，summerholiday（暑假），delicious（美味的）[来源:zzst#~e@p^&.com]习作点评：[来源~:@中国^#教%育出版网]文章描绘了海南岛的风景美食，以及自己愉快的心情，不愧是一篇美文。佳作赏析：[中国教育出版^&@网*#]AvisittoBeijingThissummervacation,IwenttoBeijing.Itwasaverygreatcity!WewenttotheGreatWallfirst.Likeitsname,itwasverygreat.Wecouldseemanymountainsaroundandmanyforeigners.ThenwewenttovisitTian'anmenSquare.Itwasalsofantastic.Thereweresomanypeopleonthesquare,somewereflyingkites,someweretakingphotos.WelivedinasmallhouseinBeijing.ItwasatraditionalBeijingbuildingcalled“Four-SectionCompound”.IenjoyedmyselfalotduringthesummervacationinBeijing.Itwasagreatmemory!作文点评：本篇作文详细叙述了自己去北京游玩的全过程。先是北京的theGreatWall，再去了Tian'anmenSquare，最后又描述了Four-SectionCompound，把读者带进了一场快乐的北京旅途，充满趣味